tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4448581527599813996.post549952071142283794..comments2012-03-02T18:31:34.552-08:00Comments on A Music As Sweet As Candy: Rhetorical Questions. (Part One)Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06905816172748996764noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4448581527599813996.post-69208355741542023302011-11-22T08:53:32.672-08:002011-11-22T08:53:32.672-08:00This is where the fun part of Red Ink comes in...c...This is where the fun part of Red Ink comes in...conflicting comments! ;) The sentence Kelley mentioned is actually one of my favorite parts - I think I have a weakness for dizzying and repetitive sentences. But she does have a point that it's a bit jumbled. Perhaps "...which you think could have been thinking about you too, if only things were different."<br /><br />Otherwise, you have good questions and a brilliant rhythm.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4448581527599813996.post-91621862807436963742011-11-19T09:16:20.280-08:002011-11-19T09:16:20.280-08:00I like the composition of this. It keeps it really...I like the composition of this. It keeps it really interesting. I also think most of us have wondering at least a little of the same things ;) <br /><br />The one sentence that I really had a hard time following was: "Tell me, why do you waste your thinking energy on the thinks that completely involve this person which you think, if only things were different, could have been thinking about you too."<br /><br />I think it needs maybe another comma, a little bit of shortening, or possibly just make it two sentences. <br /><br />Great job! Glad you joined us :)just a girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052161756577905816noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4448581527599813996.post-15926829931219779192011-11-19T07:59:28.737-08:002011-11-19T07:59:28.737-08:00good questions. ;) but can I answer them? no. beca...good questions. ;) but can I answer them? no. because I've actually wondered them before...Ruth Annhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17073083165742277630noreply@blogger.com